Tuesday, 14 March 2017

Writing - WALT: Make boring sentences more interesting

WALT: Make boring sentences more interesting

1.      Mrs Perkins, Room 21s teacher, has brown hair and blue eyes.
Mrs Perkins, Room 21s teacher, has light brown hair and sky blue eyes.

Mrs Perkins, Room 21s teacher, has curly, brown hair and crystal blue eyes
Mrs Perkins, Room 21s teacher, has chocolate brown eyes and blue eyes the colour of the sky.
Mrs Perkins, Room 21s teacher, has chocolate brown hair and ocean blue eyes.
Mrs Perkins, Room 21s teacher, has chocolate brown hair and bright blue eyes like the ocean.
Mrs Perkins, Room 21s teacher, has brown, curly hair and bright blue, shiny eyes.

2.     My imaginary friend talks and plays with me.
My brave imaginary friend helps me when I get into trouble and when I am scared.
My imaginary friend talks to me excitedly and tells me scary stories.
My imaginary friend talks to me like a chatterbox and tells me sweet stories to help me fall asleep.
My imaginary friend talks to me slowly and tells me scary stories.
My kind imaginary friend talks to me and tells me adventurous stories.
My imaginary friend talks to me and tells me wonderful stories.
My imaginary friend talks a lot and tells me fascinating stories.
My imaginary friend whispers to me and tells me entertaining and slightly spooky stories.

3.      It was a cold, cloudy day.
It was a thundery cold day and the clouds were roaring.
It was a horrible, wet day and the clouds were grey like the ash from a fire.
It was a gloomy rainy day and the clouds were crying many tears.
It was a freezing, rainy day and the puffy, fluffy clouds were as grey as an old lady’s hair.
It was a very rainy day and the fluffy clouds were as grey as concrete.

4.      My teddy, Spotty, is round and fluffy.
My teddy, Spotty, is spherical and fluffy like dogs’ fur.
My teddy, Spotty, is fat like a pig and fluffy like a rabbit.
My teddy, Spotty, was covered in caramel spots and was fluffy.
My teddy, Spotty, is as fat as a pig and fluffy like cotton candy.
My teddy, Spotty, is fat and soft like a ball of dough.




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